Well, Madison has challenged us again. This time with a beautiful picture:
Here is my contribution:
We met and the sun lit up my world
Eye to eye we met each challenge head on
Our love making us stronger
But the clouds came
Blocking the sun
Rain fell from the skies like tears down my face
The storms wiped away every happy memory
Every laugh, every piece of joy gone
Killed by the thunder and lightning
We went our separate ways
Never looking back
Suddenly the clouds were gone
The sun was shining
My world was washed clean
And a rainbow crossed my world
Bringing a promise of better things to come
Miss Independent 
“This too shall pass.” Inscription on the ring given to the Sultan by the Vizier.
Loved your poem and the way it reveals the cyclical nature of lice and love.
Aloha,
Doug
So….Thought ‘life and love’ and typed ‘lice and love’. LOL. Might as well leave it like that. Aloha again, D.
LOL gotta love typos! The ex could fairly be compared to lice, so the typo wasn’t altogether a bad one! hehe
This sounded like love ending in divorce. A not so fun happening told in a beautiful way. I kinda laughed when you called your ex lice in reply to Doug’s comment. Lol
Yeah, that’s what it is. Divorce isn’t final yet. And he is…lice, that is! Well, that’s what I call him in polite company 🙂
Here’s my linky in case someone wants to read: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/fields-of-wildflowers/
thanks goodness for rainbows, lovely poem you got there…
Thank you! And, you’re right. Thank goodness for rainbows!
I really like your poem here. Beautiful. I have been reading your recent posts but have not had a lot of time this week to send comments along. I had to do a lot of babysitting for my little grandchildren this week so my daughter could serve jury duty. It has lasted all week so not a lot of time to write or get on the computer.
Well thank you for reading! I understand about life being crazy – been a nuts week for me, too! I’m sure that the time spent with your grandchildren was a lot of fun for you! I wish we lived closer to my parents (they are 3000 miles away) so that they could spend more time with my kids! Thank you for the compliment on the poem. I really appreciate it and I appreciate you reading!
Everything can be used to make the next day brighter! Later you can look back but for now eyes forward!
Here’s mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/in-the-eyes-of-tragedy/
That is so true! Gotta find the silver lining somehow 🙂 Eyes forward – I don’t need to see where I’ve been…I’m too busy looking where I’m going!
this made me feel all warm inside 🙂 me thinks you have a gift my friend!
Thank you! I’m still trying this poetry stuff out, but I think I like it! 🙂
i LOVE it!
Coming from such a great poet, that is an outstanding compliment. thank you!
I love this poem, its cyclical rythm; and the rain analogy. Yes, even in love, you get up after a fall, brush off and move on for another sunny day. Thank you. Mine is here:
Thank you! Can’t wait to read yours!
Ops, forgot the link: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-sinking-low/
I love the hopeful clarity as the clouds clear away. Your positivity shines through too. Another great job!
http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers/
Thank you! I loved yours, too!
Just checking…do you have a new email address. Got a comment I have to moderate, but just want to check that it’s really you first (“Just because you’re paranoid, don’t mean they’re not after you”, lol).
No, but I did comment on your “Perfect” poem from my phone, so that may be it. Something about a twisted poem from a twisted mind, I think 🙂
Haha! Yes indeed! Great, just checking 😀
I really liked this. For me it describes a chance meeting with a total stranger, a shared short interlude making a memory to reflect upon down the road….
Thank you! I love that someone can see something so individual in it. I guess that’s the beauty of verse 🙂 Thanks for the comment!
Nice to see the silver lining (or at least the multicolour lining 😉 ) in such a sad story.
I’m not one for poetry but this was good. Nicely written.
Mine is this-a-way:
Thank you! I appreciate it! Yours was terrific!
Very nicely put together. I like the flow and the sentiment.
Thank you. I really appreciate the feedback!
A good sense of renewal here, after a sad experience. Nicely done.
Mine: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/pursuit-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Thank you!
Thank you. I appreciate it. Yours was wonderful! Many parents have had that same experience!
Beautiful words of someone ready to move on.
Yes I am! 🙂 Thank you!
A wonderfully poetic and flowing offering about a very unhappy subject. Glad you emerged to bright skies and rainbows. Thanks for sharing this.
Thank you for reading it! A friend of mine used to say, “After the storm comes rainbows.” Just have to ride out the storm. Life is too short to worry about the rain that has already passed. Thanks for stopping by!
At least one of us and write poetry, and it isn’t me. Looking for the good in a less than perfect situation is never a bad idea. Keep moving forward with a smile.
My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/facade/
Thank you! I absolutely loved yours. Really does remind me of Stephen King…great twisted mind you have there, sir!
That is a huge compliment. I hold King in very high regard. Thanks!
That was honestly the first thing I thought of when I read your piece. I am a huge fan of his earlier works and this is in that same vein. Very good stuff!
Ah, but with or without them is the question. I think it’s easy to relate to your poem – we have all been there at one point.
Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/eirinn-go-brach/
Thank you! I loved yours! Lots of great imagery – and no wonder my Friday is going so well….the faeries won! 🙂
I’ll be honest. I am not a fan of poetry and I tend to skip over it in Friday Fiction, but Madison’s new rules say I owe you a read, so here I am and I’ll do my best with a genre I’m not familiar with.
I thought your depiction of early love turning into storms was beautiful and heartbreaking. I want to read the last few lines as a return to happiness with the same person, but the comments and your replies suggest it’s a moving on to brighter things in the future. Either way, I’m glad you leave us with hope.
Personally, I think I’d have preferred “Rain fell like tears down my face” instead of the “from the skies words” as it would seem more of a metaphor, in line with the rest of the piece, but I don’t know how that fits with the shape of your poem.
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fiction-the-lie-of-the-land/
Thank you for reading, even if it was imposed by Madison 🙂 Actually, very good feedback. I am an organic writer and don’t generally go back and read what I wrote (I hate doing that), so it’s nice to hear other people’s takes on what I wrote. And, yes, I am moving on without him to a much brighter future than I would have had with him (while he moves on with a woman that looks like Mr. Ed was her father….good luck to her). But poetry is great because you can get what you want or need from a given piece without prejudice. Thank you so much for stopping by and reading. I really appreciate it.
Not at all – sorry if I sounded grudging. I do enjoy the variety of FF, so if there’s a bit of poetry mixed in, why not!
No, no worries. I don’t like to read poetry normally, either. This is only the third poem I’ve ever written and it doesn’t even feel like poetry for me. FF is helping me to explore places I would have never gone in my writing and I’m glad of the feedback!
Pretty autobiographic. But nicely tuned. Are you watching “The Good Wife”? Very well written take on the wronged woman getting a life of her own. Good luck with yours. Bring it on!
Laura Lindaura
I’m not watching the show, but I did when it first started. It’s very well acted! Thank you so much for your feedback and the encouragement!
Dear Forgotten,
Your poem reminded me of one I wrote long ago (and almost used with this prompt). Here tis
WAITING FOR THAT RAINBOW
It’s been cloudy for a long time,
and I’m not talking about the sky
It might get worse before it gets any better,
but one of these days we’re gonna see the sunshine
Everyday seems like the same old drag
There should be more than to life this to life
But I keep on dreaming, keep on believing
that one of these days we’re gonna see the sunshine
It’s so easy to feel pessimistic
when it always rains on your parade,
but there’s a new wind blowin’, I can feel a change comin’
and one of these days we’re gonna see the sunshine
I asked the Good Lord for the forecast,
and He gave me this reply
Keep looking for the blue sky, waiting for the rainbow,
cause one of these days you’re gonna see the sunshine
Very nice! I like it. A “keep your head up, it’s gonna get better” sentiment that more of us should remember. Thank you for sharing!
I’m always glad when someone does a poem instead of a story – brings its own set of challenges, and I’d say you carried it off well! Nice piece. (and thanks for commenting on mine!)
Brian (Here’s the link for your readers: http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/18/wake-up-where/)
Thank you! I am in awe of those of you that can come up with a story in just 100 words. Poetry seems to be what I can do with that limit! 😉 Thanks for your comment and I loved yours!
Sounds like a stormy relationship. I can relate. Nice use on an extended metaphor to make a thoughful and nicely written story. Thanks for reading and commenting on mine.
Thank you for the comment. It was a bit stormy, especially at the end. I’m glad it was relatable to you, kinda. Not glad you went through that, though. Thank you for stopping by!
Sweet and sad at the same time. The relationship seems to be under some kind of spell where the weather affects the outcome, or at least your main character’s heart. Good Share here’s mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-country-walk.html
Thank you! I really liked your post as well. Wonderfully written! Thanks for stopping by!
Lovely poem. The sadness of love lost tempered by hope for tomorrow. Thanks for sharing.
Here’s mine
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/rainbows-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/
Thank you! I’m glad you appreciated it. Yours was really good, too! Definitely unexpected.
Aw! I love that you wrote a poem! Great imagery and such a hopeful ending! Here’s mine for the sake of sharing with others: http://saberdragon.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/flash-friday-fictioneers-rainbows-end/
Thank you! I haven’t tried writing a 100 word story yet, but maybe next week. I’m in awe of y’all that do!! 🙂 I enjoyed yours very much!!
Thanks, and its not all that hard as long as you can keep from too much detail or whatever you find that works– I’m still learning! Mine is keeping down detail and dialogue. I actually exceeded 100 words! I really look forward to reading your story or poetry next week!
beautiful, nice to see something other than a story 🙂
Thank you! I appreciate that. 🙂
Beautiful poem!
Thank you so much!
I’m glad you were able to take such hope and a feeling of renewal from the image 🙂
If I have one suggestion, it’s to try and vary your word choice. I apologize if it was deliberate, but “My world was washed clean/And a rainbow crossed my world” threw me off because “world” was used twice (there was an double instance of “met” earlier on as well). Possibly “a rainbow crossed my path” or maybe reusing “skies” here would be less jarring. Best, Stacey
Thank you! I noticed that after I published the post. I would definitely have made the changes you mentioned. I pound it out and then just throw it out there. I need to remember to polish it first! Thanks for the input!
and with structure to make it even better.
I’m not sure what you mean by this. This is only the 2nd poem I’ve written, so I haven’t a clue what I’m doing. Can you explain this comment to me?
as things were growing dim, you had the poem centered and the lines were getting more narrow, like her hope was dwindling too. then when things were getting more positive, the lines were expanding, as her hope was growing. intentional? no?
No, not intentional at all! I didn’t even notice it until you pointed it out. Some poet I am! LOL
I’m not sure that I’ve been to your blog before. What a treat! Some say we can’t truly enjoy the sweet without the of bitter…and the pleasure without the pain. Your poem illustrated that very well. Thank you for sharing.
~Susan
Thak you for stopping by! And thanks for the comment! Stop by anytime…door is always open!
I enjoyed the connections you made to nature. A hopeful ending is always nice.
Thank you 🙂
I really like this and can relate to it. The period before and during a divorce can be very stormy, but isn’t it wonderful when that rainbow finalls shows?
Yes it is! Thanks for reading!
Nicely done. Don’t see a whole lot of poetry in response to these, cool. Thanks for the nice comment on mine 🙂
Thank you for stopping by to read mine. Yours was really good! Thanks for posting the link.
Cloud will always give way to sunshine and bright new beginnings, a lovely poem.
A nice poem. I’m not used to reading something so optimistic so this was a nice turn. I especially liked the physical layout of the lines and how they form a shape. I don’t know if that was intentional or not but it adds interest to the poem and gives a structure to the reading.
Thank you for reading. No, the structure wasn’t intentional and I had no idea that folks even looked at that until Sunday! I’m really new to writing poetry, so I’m going by feel. Thank you for the nice compliment. I sincerly appreciate it!
Great offering!
Thank you! 🙂
You’re “new to writing poetry”?! Well, some things can’t be “taught.” Obviously, you are an inherently talented poet!